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His Answer

The carotid artery was a far better target than the jugular vein.  Daniel was well aware of this when he drew his knife from his back pocket.  Trial and error in the back alleys far from his house had shown him what was quickest and quietest, and how to avoid the spray of blood from young men and women’s necks.  Even if a few choice splatters landed on his sleeves or pants, the soiled layer of clothes could be abandoned with his pretty pale ones and the blackening pools they lay in.

His lady was too dark, sandy skinned but for the hard white lines he could see on her bare forearms and trailing up from the open collar of her black shirt.  No line crossed where he knew the blood river brought red to her face, her eyes, her mind.  Daniel smiled at the blank stretch, licking his lips at the delicious white that would come sweeping across her body.

“Hey, sweet baby,” he whispered.  “Sweet baby mine, come here.  I’ll make you all better.  All pretty again, like God meant you.”  She paused.  Daniel did not.  There was no hearing him speak, so quietly that his footsteps echoed over his voice.  Her pause only let him closer, just as his good lady should allow it.  He tapped his thumb on the dull, flat side of the knife.  She started to walk once more, hands tucked in the pockets of her black pants.

She was too tall.  Her legs could carry her away with long strides he was unable to match easily.  She was his good lady, though, her pace slow and steps short.  Daniel could outpace her if he cared to, but he went only just faster.  An alley, unlit by a dead streetlamp, lay ahead.  It would not do to come to her before then.

The chime of metal against concrete shocked his heart into speed, his hand closing tighter on the knife’s handle.  His lady swore aloud, turning to jog into the alley after the dropped coins.  Daniel smiled and followed.  Her coins would not be enough if she offered them like so many had done before.

“Sweet baby, pretty lady,” he sighed.  “You’re my gold, lady.  All my gold, all your red.  Come here, mine.  All mine.”  He went around the corner.

A quarter was shoved into his right eye.  Daniel screamed, but the hand over his mouth stopped the noise pouring from his throat.  He dropped the knife, his right hand reaching to his face and his left grabbing at the lady’s arm.  When his fingertips scrabbled at her wrist, she tightened her hold, long sharp nails slicing into his cheeks.

“What did your God mean for me?” she asked.  Daniel whimpered into her palm, thick liquid seeping down his face and over her thumb.  Through his left eye’s tears, he saw her eyes, red as the spray he had wanted so much to bring into the night.  There was neither smile nor frown on her face.  Two thin lines, stark white as all the rest Daniel had seen before, made the “t” of a cross on her right cheek.  She watched him, nail-claws cutting deeper with each breath Daniel took.

He screamed into her hand, kicking toward her crotch as hard as he could.  For how often he had dodged the same upward leg swing, the way his lady caught his shin with her free hand was something of a surprise.  He wrenched away from her hands, howling again when her claws cut deep trenches from the holes in his cheeks.  Daniel fell to the ground, slapping his hands on the concrete until his palm came upon his knife.

Still screaming, he stabbed his lady in the belly, digging and gouging until her red mixed with his on his face.  He could not hear if she joined him in shrieking stereo, his remaining eye squeezed shut while he screeched fit to tear apart his throat.

“I asked you a question.”  Her hand came down, and she let the blade pierce completely through her palm.  Daniel did not struggle when she took the knife from him.  She drew the metal from her flesh, the wounds knitting closed and the flow of blood ceasing in hand and stomach alike.

“What did your God mean for me?” she asked.

“Don’t kill me!”  She slapped him, claws carving new lines on his face.

“I asked you a question.  Answer me.”  Daniel, jeans steaming as his urine soaked them, could not breathe.  Each attempt did more to aid the bile rising in his throat, every thought focused to keep it from erupting into his mouth and through the holes in his cheeks.

“Fucking freak!”  He swung his arm high and wide, cracking his knuckles against her nose and knocking her away.  Before she could return the blow, he rolled onto his knees and started to crawl.  Daniel managed to plant a foot on the ground and pushed up, standing and running from the alley.

“Somebody help me!  Please, for God’s sake, someone fucking help!”  Each shout did more to pull open his face, blood dribbling from his slackened chin as he ran.  Car alarms went off when he stumbled against doors, hoods, trunks.  Red fingerprints streaked on white paint, blue, dark green, and pink drops of spit and sweat-thinned blood fell beside those streaks.  Daniel’s feet caught on one another, and he hit the ground once more.  Loose granite slipped into the holes in his face, the taste of exhaust, rubber, and rotted garbage settling on his tongue.

The cars blared around him, but no apartment tenant or restaurant patron bellowed for owners to shut off the noise.  Daniel, panting and spitting, rose up on his knees.  He stared, looking about the long lifeless street.

“Somebody!”  One of the car alarms was cut off in mid-honk, the rearmed system beeping.  “She’s some kind of monster!”  Another alarm quieted.  “She’s going to kill me!”  A horn’s blast was his only response.  “Stop fucking worrying about your cars and help me!”

“Not until you answer me.”  Daniel turned, gravel shifting under his knees, and his lady’s hand closed in the collar of his jacket.  She lifted him from the ground, his feet dangling as she held him with his face above hers.

“What did your God mean for me?” she asked.

“I don’t know!” Daniel sobbed.  The salt of his tears and sweat burned in the holes of his face, the liquid from his right eye oozing in to coat his tongue.  “I don’t know!”

“What if I was meant to kill you for trying to kill me?” she asked.  “If that was true, would you die quietly?”

“I want to live, for Christ’s sake!” Daniel said.  So quickly that his legs hung in the air from inertia, she slammed him to the ground.  Sharp stone edges jabbed through cloth and flesh alike, and he gave a high-pitched yelp at the pain.

“If you can’t tell me about your God, tell me why I shouldn’t kill you,” she murmured.

“I’m a person!” Daniel said.  “Everyone wants to live!  For God’s sake, just let me go!”

“That’s hardly a good reason.”  The jacket cloth gathered in her hand began to smolder.  He felt the heat of her fingers spike, blistering the skin of his chest as black flames danced into the world with his jacket as a stage.

“Don’t!  Please don’t!”  She did not reply, blinking once when the fire spread to his flesh and he screamed louder than before.  He slapped at her face, but cut his hand when his palm parted her lips and struck the sharp teeth in her mouth.  The fire burrowed deeper into his chest and he let out a sob.

“I’m sorry!” he said.  “I’m sorry!”  She drove her fist into his throat, snapping his neck before the black flames could reach his heart.  His eye widened at the last flash of pain before his mind went blank.  The woman stepped away from the body, watching the black flames spread through the clothes and to the rest of the inert flesh.  After a time, she turned away from the scent of scorched hair and charred cotton, listening to the pop of the meager fat in the fire.

When all sound but her breathing faded, she turned about.  Ashes lay in a greasy gray-black smear on the ground.  Where the body’s head had lain, the silver blob of the melted quarter shone dull yellow in the light of the streetlamps.  She let out a low, long sigh, rubbing her eyes with the heels of her hands.  Without looking at the smear on the ground, she started away, hands in her pockets and shoulders aching from long-standing weariness.  The body had been nothing, and the man that inhabited it was even less.  She still had no answer, and she walked with the noise of sirens fading in the distance behind her.

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What? I'm posting something? :O

I've been rather blocked with everything lately. This is actually the second short story assignment from my fiction class, done as a slight response to the group workshop session.

Yes, I was aggravated. When people who don't know how to write dialogue or the difference between "rationed" and "rationalized" start questioning my word choice and sentence structure, I want to smack them. (Actual quote from a story I read: "...In the distance, Jacob recognized the sound of a helicopter. 'Oh my! That is a helicopter!'" Idiot boy.)

This was, I think, also a response to my own block. Tao and Farrah, for some reason or another, are having trouble getting out on the page. The short story I wrote with them (which won't be uploaded because it's a shortened version of a chapter from the novel) frustrated me a bit. Since I don't want to be frustrated with them, I'm going to give them a break. Here, I picked up a character about as old as them: Kei Dolan.

I don't really know why this wound up being so violent. It must be cathartic for something. Still, I enjoy it quite a bit. It's very much Kei's style of doing things. Also, I had way, way too much fun writing Daniel's crazy-bastard dialogue. He's a freak. :giggle:

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hmmm..it was creepy....but interesting. Noe I want to know what kind of answers she is seekin...so I want more of this. :D

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That was scary! 0_o

I couldn't stop reading it till the end eventhough it was scary. XD;

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Hee. Oh, Kei. I missed you and your total disregard for human life.

Not that Daniel was so much with the human (or is it humane, rather? or both, I suppose.) part. Is it a bad thing that I missed reading stories wherein a lovely psychopath getting his just deserts, too?

I like your horror stories. And your psychos. They're very neatly, precisely scary, and insane. No mucking about with devices that don't work or gratuitous gore in lieu of actual horror, just straight-up scariness from beginning to end, even when the tables turn.

(Now the real question about that Jacob character is if he is a slave to fashion in addition to being an idiot boy. I somehow think so. It seems fitting, n'est pas?)

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mmmm interesting. Just what I needed to read before going home at night, but interesnting anyway. And scary...
You've made me curious about why would she seek that answer.

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Interesting. *rubs chin* The Question remains.
Well catharsis is good for you. I know I misspelled it, sue me. Anyway I really liked it. Very interesting and extremely violent. I must note that is was fascinating that you mentioned that Daniel killed both men and women. For a sexual predator that is extremely rare.

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However creepy this sounds, I love writing psychopaths' dialogue. There's a great challenge there. :)

I don't quite know what answers Kei wants. I need to work with her more. :XD:

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:) I do enjoy my horror stories. The fact that you finished it is also a fun bit.

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:XD: I missed her too. She's a fun lass to watch run about in the world, picking and choosing who dies.

Daniel was a fun boy, for how short he lived. Psychopaths are actually a challenge to write, considering how easily they can be poorly done. Also, the standards of a good psychopath are pretty darn high, so it's great to hear him called a lovely one. Just desserts are delicious, after all. ;P

I love horror. There is a fine line to walk with gore, since I'm not shooting for the Saw 3 type splatter fest. It has to be effective, all the things that happen. I loved Kei's idea of dropping the coins and then jamming one into Daniel's eye. Such a good feint, and such a jolt. Smart woman, her.

(*cough* He was supposed to be a robot. I never picked up on it, and kept saying, "why the fuck isn't he dying if he's not breathing air?!" The writer was a twit, I'm sorry to say.)

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